Rhiannon's First Narration

Well we did our first narration exercise today with one of Aesop's fables. Rhia did much better than I anticipated - I actually had to encourage her to use less detail - which surprised me. Here is her narration:

The Hare and the Tortoise - narrated by Rhiannon

Once there was a hare and a tortoise, A rabbit made fun of the turtle, he said how slow you move. They agreed to make a race. But they asked who would decide on the winner? Let's ask Mr Fox said the hare. Fox came and said go and the race began. The hare took great big bounds and leaps and soon was out of sight. But the tortoise went plot plot so slow you couldn't see him move. The hare got tired in the middle so he laid down on the side of the road. Plot plot the tortoise went until he passed hare. When the hare woke up the tortoise was so close to the finish line. He ran as fast as he could but when he got close the hare was at the finish line. Fox said tortoise is the winner of this race. Remember this: plodding wins the race but fast and lazy loses the race.